Jamie Thomas has posted 79 comments
I like this a lot! Short burrsts are really hard to write well, but this was extremely enjoyable. You cleary have serious writing talent!
Posted 10 years ago on The assassin never wore bootlaces. The boots...
This is great just for the "slotting into the tidy image" line, and then keeps on getting better!
Posted 10 years ago on That afternoon there is a birthday party. Lots of...
I'm actually starting to think that you are a VERY talented poet. Like seriously good. Maybe you should experiment with the poems you write, try different styles (like you do here) and maybe try write them as stories or as character descriptions. I have faith that you will do an amazing job :)
Posted 10 years ago on Wolves are out for me Insomnia; I can’t sleep...
This story came from nowhere, and I just started writing it, rtying to keep it small as possible. I don't even know if you guys saw the ending coming, but even if you did, I hope you enjoy it anyway :) I'm open to any criticism or feedback as always :)
Posted 10 years ago on As soon as he pulled his creaking body out of...
This is a very very good burrst. As Ross said, very atmospheric, while also teasing us just enough without being overbearing. I loved your descriptions, which would normally be too much in a larger piece but worked perfectly here.
Posted 10 years ago on The wet leaves clung to her bare feet like a...
@Charlotte Buchanan By technical I meant like describing all the things that made it perfect on a technical level, like the building if tension, the way you created that characters with quite a bit of depth even though you barely went into much detail. I especially loved the underlying theme of malice that ran through the mistresses thoughts, which was never quite evil but never completely justified. And the twist ending, wow. I read it as the mistress maybe not caring about the death, but also it could have been that she was in shock. Then lastly, the underlying theme of us not really knowing everything about people, "the secret lives of people" is a favourite saying of mine and it often applies even to those we are most intimate with. The man lied to both his wife and mistress, and the mistress kept lying to him when she teased him. This, along with the idea of the diary made me think of the theme of lies and secrets being very prevalent in our lives. I probably went completely astray here, and you may have intended nothing I have written about but even if you didn't, it still is a wonderful piece.
Posted 10 years ago on Apparently, Rob, my lover, kept a diary...
I actually enjoyed this. As much as I love your serious stuff, the more lighthearted stuff is so great too.
Posted 10 years ago on "We have to stop her from talking. If she tells...
This is amazing. Like, wow. I won't get all technical, all I can say is that the twist at the end hit me, and it hit me hard! Very effective!
Posted 10 years ago on Apparently, Rob, my lover, kept a diary...
You write AMAZING poetry. This is sublime and complicated yet beautiful and horrifying on so many levels. It is FANTASTIC!
Posted 10 years ago on “Kill yourself.” “You’re worthless.” “Return...
This was more of a philosophical musing than a burrst, but I enjoyed writing it and it wasn't prepared as part of a speech about my deep personal feelings, so it really is just a piece of fiction. I hope you enjoy reading it.
Posted 10 years ago on How loud is your opinion if you type it? Can you...