Michael McClung has posted 2 comments

Hi Rebecca, a good evocative burst. When you go back to play around with it again, you'll notice the pov character says he can't see or hear anything, but then he/she does (rain etc).

Posted 8 years ago on I am lost. The heavy rain pelts down in sheets...

Nice. the only part of the dialect that didn't sound quite right to me was 'oughta' though that might just be me. More of a gangster 'why I oughta...' I'd have expressed it as ' I shouldn't ought to' Hope this helps :)

Posted 8 years ago on Ode to Billie Joe I keep telling myself I...