Michael McClung has posted 2 comments
Nice. the only part of the dialect that didn't sound quite right to me was 'oughta' though that might just be me. More of a gangster 'why I oughta...' I'd have expressed it as ' I shouldn't ought to' Hope this helps :)
Posted 8 years ago on Ode to Billie Joe I keep telling myself I...
Hi Rebecca, a good evocative burst. When you go back to play around with it again, you'll notice the pov character says he can't see or hear anything, but then he/she does (rain etc).
Posted 8 years ago on I am lost. The heavy rain pelts down in sheets...