Hugo Müller-Downing has posted 6 comments
I thought of this when I was falling asleep and kept forgetting about it but I finally wrote it down and developed it a little. I'm planning to keep writing this but feel I need to do a little more research/brainstorming before I continue. I'm not very happy with it at the moment but hey, it's a burrst! It's titled, 'The Iron Queen''.
Posted 9 years ago on She stood up and began to walk around the hall...
This was a little forced and it managed to delete itself once so this is what I could pick up from the lost first version. It's quite cold where I live so I tried to take some inspiration from being cold and perhaps a little delusional.
Posted 9 years ago on "Can't you see it?", she said. "What? What are...
Wow! This kept me hooked all the way through and the ending was very sudden! I'll be looking forward to more of this, thanks!
Posted 9 years ago on Susannah stumbled over a particularly large...
@Anthony Blackshaw Yes, I noticed that when I accidentally closed the page only to find it had be saved (Phew!), thanks for that!
@Robert Sweeney Thanks! I'm hoping to find some time to write again this week. It's great seeing all the creativity on this website!
Posted 9 years ago on He drifted off to sleep. The lullaby did not seem...
@Anthony Blackshaw Thanks! I was going to suggest a save button but then I read the FAQ, no saving, straight out of your head and onto the web!
Posted 9 years ago on He drifted off to sleep. The lullaby did not seem...
I'm glad you like it! I'm a fan of this kind of fantasy myself and that's why I wanted to try it out.
I completely agree with you, having never really tampered in dialogue before, I really appreciate the feedback.
I've always been told that I use too many commas so I'll take a look at that too!
Posted 9 years ago on She stood up and began to walk around the hall...