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Jessica Cambrook, 23 Jul '12

John
I never stopped thinking about you. Not once. Not even when my darling, loyal wife Susanna found out. I had to break things off for the children, of course, but I kept our letters as a small act of devoted rebellion. There was more passion interwoven in our words than I had experienced in a twenty year marriage to Suzie. She paled in comparison to you. My paintings had more life when you were around. You were my beautiful, fiery muse.

Susanna
I never found out who you were. Now, I have no one to ask. Oh, John thought I didn't know where he hid those letters. The two things he kept dearest to his heart were stored in his art box, the awful reminders of your affair and his painting tools. All those letters were signed in the same way, "Forever yours". Who were you? Were you prettier than me? Younger? More intelligent? Without my sister Elizabeth's support, I would have crumbled. She held me close as I cried at John's funeral. I just hope that in the afterlife it is me he chooses, not you. He can't have us both there.

Elizabeth
How can I deal with your death when there is no one on this Earth I can turn to? You changed me, John. I never stayed with anyone longer than a few weeks before I met you. If you had been single we would have been married within weeks. True soul mates. I never stopped loving you. Even at your funeral, comforting my grieving sister Suzie and missing you secretly, terribly, I wished to be with you again. Forever yours.

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  • Anthony Blackshaw said...

    This is the first time I've seen this format for a burst (perhaps any fiction less than 500 words, I can't recall). The result felt honest and was a joy to read.

    • Posted 6 years ago
  • Ross Tarran said...

    This is intriguingly written, if a little confusing - I suppose this is what's known as a love triangle?
    Or some kind of love rhombus perhaps...

    • Posted 6 years ago
  • Jessica Cambrook said...

    @Ross Tarran I wish I'd added another person just so I could proudly say this is a love rhombus! John is married to Susanna who is sisters with Elizabeth who is having an affair with John.
    @Anthony Blackshaw Thanks :D I wanted it to be like three mini thought diaries.

    • Posted 6 years ago
  • Ross Tarran said...

    @Jessica Cambrook Ah, thanks! I thought this was one person writing to three others (each named before what was written to them)...
    You can see how it became more confused, especially the first section!

    • Posted 6 years ago
  • Jessica Cambrook said...

    Thanks @Liam Volk! How can I make it less confusing? I'd rather people enjoyed it than wondering what's going on...

    • Posted 6 years ago
  • Ross Tarran said...

    @Jessica Cambrook I think if the name was below each paragraph/letter rather than above, like 'All my love, John' or something after the first, it might help readers to more quickly understand who is 'speaking' in each case?

    • Posted 6 years ago
  • Jessica Cambrook said...

    Ahhh yeah! Thanks I'll do that now :D

    • Posted 6 years ago
  • Jessica Cambrook said...

    For some reason 'edit' isn't working...... I'll try again later

    • Posted 6 years ago
  • Ross Tarran said...

    You can only edit for up to 24 hrs after posting a burst unfortunately - maybe I can see if @Anthony Blackshaw could give you the editing ability on this burst for another few hours or something! He'll see this, so is sure to come and give his thoughts.

    • Posted 6 years ago
  • Anthony Blackshaw said...

    Hi @Jessica Cambrook, yeah sorry about that, the restriction is there to prevent people changing their bursts to something completely different later on - I don't know why they would do that - but it seemed like a reasonable fear at the time - now it seems less reasonable.

    I'll give it some review and perhaps we'll look to remove the restriction moving forward.

    • Posted 6 years ago