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Orlando Ramos, 16 Feb '13

He never thought he would lose it all, becoming nothing more than a whisper upon the wind. It was funny actually, in a beautifully cruel way, how quickly it all happened, from start to finish. A brief blaze that paled the stars, a light that appeared to herald all creation, but one that died quicker than he thought possible. He failed. Against all potential hope, he had failed once again. Darkness was now all that greets him, a nothingness so devoid of existence he could not even feel the cold, nor even conceive what such a thing was. All that was left to do was wait for a new chance to arise, for the terrible agony lay in the reality that this was his thirty-fifth attempt at ending the plague that surrounded him. At ending his loneliness. Patience was a hard thing to hold on to when madness threatened to devour it. So far he'd held it at bay, but for how much longer he would have the will to do so was indiscernible. He needed to destroy it all. He needed to create.

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  • Orlando Ramos said...

    Hey all, hows it going? This is just something that crossed my mind just now. Kinda eerie, but let me know what you think.

    • Posted 8 years ago
  • Anthony Blackshaw said...

    Hi Orlando, this is a really good opening, it peaked my interest and raised lots of questions I want to know the answer to.

    One small thing, I think - 'Darkness was now all that greets him' should be 'Darkness was now all that greeted him'

    • Posted 8 years ago
  • Orlando Ramos said...

    Hey Anthony, Ahh right haha, thanks, I meant to correct that. Thanks for the input though. I wonder how this story will end up.

    • Posted 8 years ago
  • Anthony Blackshaw said...

    Thanks for liking my comment :)

    When you comment if you use the @ symbol followed by the username of the person (an autocomplete should appear if you start to type their name or username), they will get an email letting them know you've mentioned them in a comment. You don't need to use an @ when your leaving a comment for the bursts author because they always get an email to let them know.

    The autocomplete system isn't perfect - it's an area I need to improve, so any problems let me know :)

    • Posted 8 years ago