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Mary Beth W., 22 Dec '12

Listen. You tell me that you hear nothing, and you are right. But there is a difference between listening and hearing.

Listen, and I will tell you the truth. I will resurrect the talents borne into you, those that have not been taught to you, but still remain in your blood. But first you must listen.

You ask me what to listen for? You are a fool. But that is only to be expected. You, after all, have not been taught the ways of our kind.

What should you listen for? Hmm. It is a good question, after all.

Everything on this favored planet has a song, one that can only be heard if you listen with the deepest desire in your core. The stars twinkling in the distance, the moon and her shadowy children, the dew on the grass; yes, they all are part of one greater melody, one big symphony of voices.

Listen, I tell you!

Do you hear the strain of the ocean's pull against the shore? Do you hear the creak of flower petals unfolding, raising and hailing the sun? Can you detect the faintest cry of a dying bird, off the farthest shores of Africa? If you are doing it right, you should hear all of this and more.

There are less desirable things that some choose to listen to. They make the mistake of tuning into the mortal cries of humans. They become sucked in and enraptured by such a sorrowful creed.

And, alas, one day you find them, dead and gone, turning over quietly in their grave. Do not go that way, my child, for you are only learning. You are only young.

And now can you listen?

Ah, I see that you can! Look at you, your wide, bright eyes glittering with this new found knowledge!

Use it well, my child. Listen with caution.

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  • Mary Beth W. said...

    So...It's been awhile.
    I guess I just hit a roadblock in writing. You know, that terrible spot when you have next to no inspiration and can not, for the life of you, pick up that pen and start writing?
    Yes, I was transported into that dark universe. But I'm back, now, and hopefully I'm out of that hole.
    Because holes are not good places to be.
    Anyway, not so happy with this one, but I desperately needed to write something, otherwise bad things would have happened. Don't ask. Just enjoy. And don't hurt me too much (because this burrst was probably the most terrible I have ever written. Ever.) ;)

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  • Ellie Stevenson said...

    I liked the way you used language in this, Mary Beth. Rhythmic, poetic. Lovely!

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  • Charlotte Williams said...

    I also loved the way you used language. I loved that it seemed like you were giving instruction to the reader to illuminate them, it all seemed ethereal. I would disagree that it was one of the most terrible things you've written, I really enjoyed it, and I know that writers block very well, you've just got to keep trying and you finally get something out :)

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  • Mary Beth W. said...

    Thank you both so much! What lovely comments :)

    • Posted 7 years ago
  • Mark McClelland said...

    I'm with Charlotte on this one -- I enjoyed it. The focus on lyrical language fits the theme of listening, and could probably be taken a bit further without turning too "flowery", for lack of a better word.

    One thing didn't sit right for me... "Listen with caution" seems like a harsh ending. It hit me with a smack of negativity, detracting from the potential good that comes from listening. I think the emphasis should be on choosing, not listening: "Choose cautiously what you listen to, then listen with abandon, listen like your life depends on it."

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  • Mary Beth W. said...

    Well, @Mark McClelland, you are right about the slight negativity at the last part there. I was kind of almost going for an ominous undercurrent in this piece - hence why I put in "You are a fool," and about those people who choose to listen to "less desirable things," and end up dead in the end. Not quite sure where the idea about listening to mortals and dying came from, but whatever. I was going for more of a warning at the end, a don't-listen-to-the-mortal-cries-of humans-'cause-they'll-kill-you type warning.

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  • Mark McClelland said...

    Re-reading the burst with that in mind, I get that. I think it's just a matter of personal preference on my part -- the beautiful/positive side resonates more for me.

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