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Jessica Cambrook, 14 Sep '12

His eyes don’t blink. From eleven to midnight every night, he stands and stares at me. Right at me. His skin has an ethereal glow in the milky moonlight. His clothes cling to him and his hair sags like he's all wet. Though his face is inches away from the window, his breath doesn't fog the glass. When he's there, my room turns icy cold and a thick haze descends. It's been going on for weeks now.

Though he must only be about four I’ve never seen his parents. The old house they live in seems ready to crumble any day now. Everyone avoids it like a bad memory.

His hands are pressed against the dirty, chipped window. Such tiny hands. I’ve tried waving but he doesn't even flinch. I don’t know if he’s blind. I haven't the courage to wade through the jungle of a front garden to knock on the front door to find out.

One day I decide to ask a neighbour what he knows about the house. He's lived there as long as anyone can remember. I just can’t stand his staring anymore. The neighbour regards me strangely.

“The old house yonder? That be the Blue’s family house. Or it was. They been dead a long time now, so they have. Been abandoned about sixteen years, if memory serves me rightly. Never did look sturdy. Unless you want to end up like their boy you’ll keep your distance, you will.”

That night I see the little boy again. This time, he's not staring at me.

He's pointing at something behind me.

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  • Jessica Cambrook said...

    Untold tales entry

    A different variation to the Blues, I hope you enjoyed!

    • Posted 4 years ago
  • Jamie Thomas said...

    This is a very good burrst, and it works well considering it is so small. I love little ghost stories like this, they intrigue me. You did a good job here :)

    • Posted 4 years ago
  • Ross Tarran said...

    That's not an ending... only joking. ;) It's a pretty strong ending, which saves the story from otherwise being a rather familiar ghost story (figures seen in a supposedly empty house). The final sentence is a very creepy idea, but only so powerful because of the unknown. This is definitely a burst which doesn't need another part. :)

    • Posted 4 years ago
  • Jessica Cambrook said...

    @Jamie Thomas thanks! Glad you liked it.
    @Ross Tarran I'm definitely not doing another part, this is just a little self-contained ghost story. I like ambiguous endings too much... Thanks :)

    • Posted 4 years ago
  • Angela Watt said...

    I'm reading this in bed and not sure I want to turn the lights off. That last line sent a very definite shudder through my body. Really enjoyed it @Jessica Cambrook

    • Posted 4 years ago
  • Jessica Cambrook said...

    You make me feel like my stuff is actually scary @Angela Watt! I like your feedback :D

    • Posted 4 years ago
  • Jessica Cambrook said...

    Thanks @Liam Volk!

    • Posted 4 years ago
  • Shirley Golden said...

    Hi @Jessica Cambrook you create a great atmosphere - I love your description of the boy/ghost and that his breath doesn't fog the glass! I think I'd remove 'One day...' as this reminded me I was reading a story rather than feel as if I was there. I thought your 'voice' for the neighbour was strong, and I had an image of this character without the need for physical descriptions - very good :)

    • Posted 4 years ago
  • Jessica Cambrook said...

    I agree about the 'one day' thing but it's too late to change it :( Thanks @Shirley Golden!

    • Posted 4 years ago
  • Mary Beth W. said...

    This is awesome! Can't wait to read more from you! :)

    • Posted 4 years ago