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Jessica Cambrook, 09 Sep '12

We were gods. We took the unwanted humans, leeching from the rest of us, and forced them underground, away from civilization. We had no choice, in the beginning.

At first we gave them food and water, but when it rained their tiny underground village flooded and some died by getting trapped in crevices and tiny caves.

Next we gave them huts and bedding, but they got lazy. They stopped looking for a way out and instead began entertaining themselves, warding off the boredom until their next feed.

Then it became an uncontrolled experiment. For us humans ‘On Top’, as we called normal life, we became fascinated by the behaviour exhibited ‘Down Under’. They stopped existing as ‘people’ in our eyes, just a new form of entertainment.

We questioned their morals. We gave them contraception. Would they rather ignore nature’s call to reproduce so their offspring could be spared their dark and unfulfilling life? Or would they maintain their selfish ways and continue having children to please and entertain themselves, depleting their food and water shares?

Egocentric boredom won.

We felt like gods, deciding when they would eat. What they could do. When they would die. Occassionally, we would choose one of them and with a pull of the trigger they would be gone. Just to get a reaction. They started appreciating their worthless lives more after that.

When the children got old enough we almost considered calling the experiment off and flooding Down Under to spare them all. They would never be accepted On Top, killing them would be a mercy. The children were awful, with disfigurements I could never have imagined. Extra arms, missing eyes, no mouths, head-sized growths. It made us question our morals, something we hadn’t done for many years. We were fearful for our own Lord, after what we had created. However, our experiment continued as normal.

Until one of them escaped.

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  • Anthony Blackshaw said...

    This is a really twisted but exciting idea - I hope you develop it into something longer.

    • Posted 10 years ago
  • Jessica Cambrook said...

    Thanks guys :D! I'll have to think about where this could go next, if anywhere...

    • Posted 10 years ago
  • Ross Tarran said...

    That's not an ending, it's a cliffhanger! Well it could be an ending, but you're leaving the readers to fill in a huge amount for themselves. The way the story is written, the escapee must have done something significant, or he wouldn't have been mentioned in such a dramatic way... ;)

    • Posted 10 years ago
  • Jessica Cambrook said...

    @Ross Tarran I honestly just like ambiguous endings :D sequels don't tend to be as good as first parts but I'll write another part and see how that goes :)

    • Posted 10 years ago
  • Charlotte Williams said...

    This was a great concept, I really enjoyed reading it :)

    • Posted 10 years ago
  • Ross Tarran said...

    @Jessica Cambrook I know what you mean, and I'm sure a large percentage of short stories (mine included) have quite ambiguous endings not only because of the limited word count available, but also because it creates something dramatic and thought-provoking for the reader to consider at the end.

    Don't feel you have to write another part, but it might be interesting to see what you can come up with...

    • Posted 10 years ago
  • Jessica Cambrook said...

    Nope @Ross Tarran you've bullied me into it now :) Just joking, I've got an idea now for what I could write so I'll give it a go...
    Thanks @Charlotte Williams for the feedback :D

    • Posted 10 years ago
  • Mary Beth W. said...

    Love this! Wonderful work :)

    • Posted 10 years ago
  • Angela Watt said...

    Hi @Jessica Cambrook, I really enjoyed this and particularly liked the ending. It gave me a bit of a shiver up the spine at the expectation of what might/could happen.

    • Posted 10 years ago
  • Jessica Cambrook said...

    Thanks @Angela Watt! I hope I haven't spoiled this by doing a second part D:

    • Posted 10 years ago